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Still hearing voices!

I am very sad to say that this is the last post in the "I'm Hearing Voices" blogfest! Cassie and Angie have done a wonderful job with this fest, and I have loved every single second of it! Thanks to everyone who has stopped by and left a comment, and followed my blog. I've followed many of you back, and I am having a lot of fun getting to know you all, and learning about your characters.

Today's challenge is to write a piece of emotional flash fiction in no more than 250 words. I am excited to say I did it - yay! This piece is, again, lifted from my WIP, and is written from the perspective of Shannen. Enjoy!

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I hung up the phone, leaped out of bed and quickly threw some clothes on. Even though it was still warm, I put on my jeans and a long-sleeved top because I was shivering.  As soon as I was dressed, I grabbed my mobile and my keys, and went to wait for Guy outside.

It’s weird how slow the time goes when you’re waiting. My foot tapped impatiently, and all I could think about was the possibility that we wouldn’t find him. He’d been fighting the depression so hard, but every day I could see the weight of it pulling him down further, dragging him into the depths of darkness.

I should have been there for him. I shouldn't have left him when he'd begged me to stay. I’d rejected him when he needed me most, and if I lost him…

My knees buckled a little and I leaned against a nearby street light for support.

We had to find him.

When Guy arrived, the look of worry etched on his face easily matched my own. I jumped straight into his car, and we headed for Cal’s flat.

On the way, everything seemed so unreal. Everything around me looked the same, but I felt like I was in a bad dream, and I kept hoping I’d wake up soon because with each minute that passed, the likelihood of a happy ending was drifting further away. 

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And that, ladies and gentlemen, concludes my entries in the "I'm Hearing Voices" blog challenge! Thanks again for all your support! Now I'm off to read what you have written! :D




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  1. Miranda Hardy10 February 2012 at 10:30

    Felt the anxiety in her voice. Great emotion to display.

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    1. Kyra Lennon10 February 2012 at 13:01

      I thought I'd try to do something a little different. I'm happy to hear it worked!

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  2. JE10 February 2012 at 12:43

    What a nervous, scared woman you've shown us here. Nice job!

    BTW, I LOVE the font on your blog!

    And I'm new follower *waves*

    ~JD

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    1. Kyra Lennon10 February 2012 at 13:03

      Yes, Shannen is particularly afraid during this scene, and the scene that follows is one of my favourites that I've ever written!

      Thanks, it is a cool font, and it makes things look a little more personalised.

      Thanks for the follow, I am following you back!

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  3. Clare10 February 2012 at 12:49

    HOLY.HELL! This was amazing. I need more. NOW.

    I know snippets of the story, so I'm wondering how it got to this point from what I've previously read.

    Very powerful stuff. I especially liked this line:

    "My knees buckled a little and I leaned against a nearby street light for support."

    Excellent stuff, chick!!

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    1. Clare10 February 2012 at 12:59

      Also, just noticed you've signed up for the A-Z blogging challenge. I did too. It'll be cool to share our experiences. :D

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    2. Kyra Lennon10 February 2012 at 13:04

      Thank you!

      It is a gigantic jump from the tiny parts you've seen - a lot of stuff goes down lol!

      And yeah, I thought I'd give the A-Z challenge a try....hope I can keep up with it!

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  4. Jay Andrew10 February 2012 at 13:06

    I like how in her worrying and concern, you can read how other worries beyond the situation at hand come through. An interesting character and I want to know. And nice to meet you xxx

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    1. Kyra Lennon10 February 2012 at 14:01

      Aww, it's great that you can see other things going on in the scene besides what it written on the page, thanks!

      Nice to meet you too, Rusty! :D

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  5. Emily R. King10 February 2012 at 15:52

    I felt her worry. I hope she finds him. : )

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    1. Kyra Lennon10 February 2012 at 16:05

      This ends up being a super intense scene, so I'm happy to hear it is building up in the right way!

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  6. Michael Offutt, Phantom Reader10 February 2012 at 16:06

    I agree with Emily King. The worry definitely comes across and I can sense how intense things are going to be. I think you can rest assured because you are definitely building it up in the right way.

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    1. Kyra Lennon10 February 2012 at 16:09

      Michael - you have made my day! That is the kind of compliment that will keep me smiling for a long time, so thank you! :D

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  7. Sarah Ahiers10 February 2012 at 16:18

    Ooh! LOVED that last line! Such a great place to leave us. I definitely felt the worry in the piece.

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  8. Anonymous10 February 2012 at 16:20

    Ooh that was fast paced showing the urgency and tension. I hope they find him. It reminded me of the night my cat went missing, recently. I felt just as surreal.

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    1. Kyra Lennon10 February 2012 at 18:29

      It is strange how everything slides out of focus when something bad happens. I hope you found your cat safe and well!

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  9. Rena10 February 2012 at 17:09

    I liked your part about how everything seemed surreal. That's been so true for me whenever I'm doing something like go to a funeral or a hospital for someone who's dying.

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  10. Elizabeth Seckman10 February 2012 at 18:20

    Very good. Funny how the world looks different when you're in a bad state. You captured it very well.

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    1. Kyra Lennon10 February 2012 at 18:31

      Thank you! I'm glad so many people liked that part about the world looking different - it is a very strange feeling!

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  11. T.D. McFrost10 February 2012 at 18:44

    I concur with Elizabeth (with a z), this was captured beautifully! You are one of my favorites!

    Thank you for being awesome!

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    1. Kyra Lennon10 February 2012 at 18:46

      Right back at ya!

      Thanks so much for the compliment, it really means a lot when someone enjoys what I write enough to leave a comment! <3

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  12. Angela Cothran10 February 2012 at 20:44

    I could totally feel her impatience and desperation! Very well done Kyra :) I sure hope they find Cal unhurt!

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    1. Kyra Lennon10 February 2012 at 21:00

      Thanks!

      I wish I could reveal what happens right now lol!

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  13. Unknown10 February 2012 at 20:50

    I love the second half of the last line!

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  14. Cassie Mae10 February 2012 at 21:24

    Oh man, am I familiar with the impatient feeling! Lol. This was so super fabulous Kyra! :)

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  15. Jenny S. Morris10 February 2012 at 23:25

    Nice job!! I want to know what she finds.

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  16. Carol Kilgore11 February 2012 at 00:52

    Oh. Now I have to read this. Good job!

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    1. Kyra Lennon11 February 2012 at 08:41

      That's the reaction I was hoping for lol! Thank you!

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  17. Cortney Pearson11 February 2012 at 02:55

    Nice work, I really felt her worry and anxiety! This has been really fun. :D

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    1. Kyra Lennon11 February 2012 at 08:41

      Thanks Cortney, it really has been lots of fun!

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  18. Kelley Lynn11 February 2012 at 05:11

    I so want to know what she finds! Great display of impatience. Thank you for sharing!

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  19. McKenzie McCann11 February 2012 at 06:28

    I can relate. You get in the character's head really well.

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    1. Kyra Lennon11 February 2012 at 08:39

      Thanks, I think (hope) that one of my biggest strengths is emotion so it's good to hear I'm doing it right!

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  20. Tara Tyler11 February 2012 at 17:19

    she wants to help before its too late!
    nice portrayal of desperation!

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  21. dolorah11 February 2012 at 18:24

    The guilt and worry is well written. Your characters are well developed and believable. I have enjoyed them in this blogfest.

    .......dhole

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  22. Green Monkey11 February 2012 at 20:50

    I never even heard of the "I'm hearing voices" blogfest. I'm late to the party again! darn...

    very believable characters (not to repeat the other person who said this)

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    1. Kyra Lennon11 February 2012 at 20:58

      Lol, it's really rubbish missing out on blogfests!I found one today that I'd love to have been a part of, but I was way too late!

      Thanks for the compliment! :D

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  23. Leigh Covington11 February 2012 at 21:34

    Fabulous entry. Intense worry and suspense. Hope they find him and there's a happy ending.

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  24. Unknown12 February 2012 at 00:21

    OMG! I wanna know what happened! It can't be sad. :(

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    1. Kyra Lennon12 February 2012 at 08:29

      There are a lot of twists and turns for the characters, I wish I could tell you what happens lol!

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  25. Anonymous12 February 2012 at 03:05

    I hope she finds him. Great emotional piece. This has been a wonderful blogfest.

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    1. Kyra Lennon12 February 2012 at 08:30

      Thank you! Yup, it certainly has been an excellent blogfest, I'm so glad I signed up!

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  26. Trisha12 February 2012 at 05:41

    Great work, I could definitely detect her fear and almost feel it myself. Good job!

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  27. Morgan12 February 2012 at 18:08

    New follower here... came by to say hi and thanks for following my blog! Looks like we're friends with a lot of the same people... funny how we haven't crossed paths yet! I'll be excited to read your future posts, looks like a fab blog ;)

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    1. Kyra Lennon12 February 2012 at 18:15

      Hi Morgan, thanks for following back!

      I am muchly looking forward to your posts too! :D

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